Hah, hmm- I'm feeling ambiguous about this one, curiously enough.
I enjoyed the details of Ianto's relationships and how the small things that appear to be central to Ianto's character and his portrayal both on the show and in your main storyline, are explored in this installment. The stopwatch- what's not to love about that idea. Ianto having other people before Lisa or Jack, the passing enthusiasm and utter cluelessness for things significant, or beautiful, or interesting, at least for a while? Loved that. The strap-on sex with Lisa? Hot, and nicely done.
Ambiguous, because I think your choice of style for this piece didn't work for me, personally. I would have liked to feel more of a connection with Ianto and Ianto's emotions and felt the pure narrative for long parts of this installment (which did make it sound very backstory-ish, no doubt) didn't transport his emotions as well as select explicit scenes of dialogue and interaction would have.
Or maybe I missed the abyss-like depth and darkness that your characters have in the rest of the series, which is, given Ianto is a teenager without death and destruction in his past, understandable and well-done, and in that case maybe it makes sense that his sadnesses and regrets and experiences don't resonate as much as those of Ianto in Torchwood 3 do.
As I said- ambiguous about this one. I liked it, and your writing can't manage to be bad, I don't think, but just based on personal preference I didn't quite enjoy the style of this as much as I do that of the other pieces, and it didn't connect with me as much as other pieces did.
(But then, I'm one of the people who don't connect to Holden Caulfield in Catcher in the Rye -- and maybe there are parallels, now that I think about it...)
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Date: 2008-11-20 11:32 am (UTC)I enjoyed the details of Ianto's relationships and how the small things that appear to be central to Ianto's character and his portrayal both on the show and in your main storyline, are explored in this installment. The stopwatch- what's not to love about that idea. Ianto having other people before Lisa or Jack, the passing enthusiasm and utter cluelessness for things significant, or beautiful, or interesting, at least for a while? Loved that. The strap-on sex with Lisa? Hot, and nicely done.
Ambiguous, because I think your choice of style for this piece didn't work for me, personally. I would have liked to feel more of a connection with Ianto and Ianto's emotions and felt the pure narrative for long parts of this installment (which did make it sound very backstory-ish, no doubt) didn't transport his emotions as well as select explicit scenes of dialogue and interaction would have.
Or maybe I missed the abyss-like depth and darkness that your characters have in the rest of the series, which is, given Ianto is a teenager without death and destruction in his past, understandable and well-done, and in that case maybe it makes sense that his sadnesses and regrets and experiences don't resonate as much as those of Ianto in Torchwood 3 do.
As I said- ambiguous about this one. I liked it, and your writing can't manage to be bad, I don't think, but just based on personal preference I didn't quite enjoy the style of this as much as I do that of the other pieces, and it didn't connect with me as much as other pieces did.
(But then, I'm one of the people who don't connect to Holden Caulfield in Catcher in the Rye -- and maybe there are parallels, now that I think about it...)